First Auction - Need Help Proofing Sales Copy
  • Hi All,

    I am preparing for my first auction listing and I would really appreciate it if anyone has the time to proofread my copy. I know you guys are busy, but I would surely appreciate the help. The copy is attached to this thread.

    Please let me know what you think - or if I forgot to include anything important.

    Thanks!
    BJ
    Post edited by Unknown User at 2010-08-12 17:02:54
  • Hey,

    At first glance, here's a few thoughts:

    - Need a more catchy title. Add NO RESERVE and $1 start - that usually does nicely.

    - I like the BIN bonuses. Put more emphasis on this - give them a call to action to click BIN at all opportunity.

    - I think it is a little bit too "wordy". Try cut it down a bit and focus on the key points.

    - I like the formatting.

    - Don't tell them you use HostGator for hosting. Just say "on my server".

    Overall, pretty decent - keep up the good work!

    Thomas
  • Thanks Thomas for taking the time to review this. I will probably list this tomorrow.

    BJ